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Valiant Soul, Gentle Soul
Laura Barton
I wish I could lay your arms down
and let you rest at last,
because I see how much you struggle and fight.
But I cannot let them lie.
I can't because I don't have the might
to wield the strength that you so desperately cling to.
After years of being beat into the ground
your legs are failing you even though you force them to keep going.
I can't stand to watch you break, valiant soul;
I can't bear to hear your cries.
Yet, I can't be the one
who takes up your role because I'll start to break, too
and you couldn't bear that either.
I wish you could be the one to step in
and make it right,
but I would never ask that of you
because your fighting days need to come to an end as well.
I have not borne witness in the same way,
but I know how you run and run and run yourself into the ground.
Gentle soul, you cannot please everyone
no matter how much you would like to
or how much they want you to.
If only I could end your self-given duties
so that you might rest, too,
still that's something else that
is beyond my ability.
I'm sorry (even though you'll tell me I shouldn't be).
Laura Barton
I wish I could lay your arms down
and let you rest at last,
because I see how much you struggle and fight.
But I cannot let them lie.
I can't because I don't have the might
to wield the strength that you so desperately cling to.
After years of being beat into the ground
your legs are failing you even though you force them to keep going.
I can't stand to watch you break, valiant soul;
I can't bear to hear your cries.
Yet, I can't be the one
who takes up your role because I'll start to break, too
and you couldn't bear that either.
I wish you could be the one to step in
and make it right,
but I would never ask that of you
because your fighting days need to come to an end as well.
I have not borne witness in the same way,
but I know how you run and run and run yourself into the ground.
Gentle soul, you cannot please everyone
no matter how much you would like to
or how much they want you to.
If only I could end your self-given duties
so that you might rest, too,
still that's something else that
is beyond my ability.
I'm sorry (even though you'll tell me I shouldn't be).
Something that's been on my mind. It's about two different people, by the way. I hope that's clear. The two big stanzas are one person each.
First two lines are not my own. They're an allusion to something else (not going to say what). Just thought I'd throw that out there so people don't scream plagiarism. (That's the funny thing about allusions though; no one ever does.)
First two lines are not my own. They're an allusion to something else (not going to say what). Just thought I'd throw that out there so people don't scream plagiarism. (That's the funny thing about allusions though; no one ever does.)
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I love the two perspectives, and how they differ and yet compliment one another. It's well done, and flows smoothly, realistically, bringing us to a resounding conclusion that rings true. This seems to well portray the relationship between two people, each in need yet not wanting to be a burden.